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Sheeting

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St Ives Rain by Rod Griffiths

St Ives Rain by Rod Griffiths

The first meeting of Worcester Writers’ Circle had us all writing a poem about a photo someone else brought in. Here’s the poem I wrote. Photo by Rod Griffiths. This is St Ives in the rain.

Sheeting

The rain, the rain, the sheeting rain,
sheens highlights in the headlights.

Through the rain, a man, head down,
carrying… what?
A leg of lamb?
A bunch of roses?
A bag of groceries from the local store?

He hurries on, a car passes.
Headlights highlight what he carries.
He rushes through the rain.

Still hurrying, lights catch his face,
he’s drenched, he shivers, poured upon,
he’s cold.
His coat clings to his sodden legs,
he’s coming back again.

The rose wilts.
The leg gets cramp.
The petals fall.
The meat goes rank.

The rain, the rain, the sheeting rain,
sheens highlights in the headlights.

Polly Robinson © 2014

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23 thoughts on “Sheeting

  1. Very powerful images Polly! Well done!

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  2. I love this one because I’ve always had a thing for photographs or paintings of someone walking in the rain (guess I should live in London…). To have words put to it brings the whole thing home. Wonderful!

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  3. Love this Polly – can hear the rain! Ssssssheeting….

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  4. HEY, NEIGHBOR….GOOD STUFF!!!!! :)

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  5. Reblogged this on By the Mighty Mumford and commented:
    FROM “MY NECK OF THE WOODS”—-A PEERLESS POET!!!

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  6. Infectious style, Polly Robinson, & great use of alliteration…

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  7. you’ve really made the photo come alive. I so enjoy your rhythm and esp. like how there is an unexpected turn in the middle and the man’s walk in the rain stretches into forever.

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    • Lovely to see that the photo comes alive for you, Jane. And that you enjoy the rhythm. That ‘unexpected turn’ works for you, then? Great :) Thanks for your comments.

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  8. been more than enough of the sheeting stuff for too long now !

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