Polly

Writings and Witterings

Amazing Haze

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Shimmering, shivering, a fast-flowing river
of seedheads shine silver, purple;
the breeze blows hither and thither,
on seeds like souls who think they’ll go through purgatory
travelling from life to heaven or hell.
Be good, be extraordinary.

Polly Robinson © 2014

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18 thoughts on “Amazing Haze

  1. I like the build up, the rhythm and a top quality finish. The sentiment, ‘be good, be extraordinary’ really has an astonishing echo of something special, somehow understated yet throwing out a challenge, with a hint of cheekiness. Playful but profound, profound but playful.

  2. Wow! Just fabulous Polly! Those few words in the last line are wonderful x

  3. Wonderful Polly! I could imagine that “purple river” and the last line was excellent! :)

    Are Litfest highlights a coming attraction? :)

  4. A beautiful description of the seed heads–and a great admonition there at the end. Thanks, Polly, for this succinct and powerful poem. k.

    • Thanks k. Lovely to see you liked the description of seed heads. I’d love to be able to take a photo from the image in my head, they were sooooooo beautiful.

  5. As others have said, Polly, I love the last line – ‘Be good. Be extraordinary.’ Lovely!

  6. You write wonderfully Polly

  7. This is extraordinary, I love it :)

  8. Thanks Alex – short but interesting :)

  9. Haze of the week, right here, Polly! :) I do like the way you animate your subject matter.

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